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PostSubject: Offering some minor assistance.    Sun Dec 04, 2011 12:08 pm

Just cause I like to feel useful, I'm offering to spend some of my free time hunting down and correcting spelling mistakes 'round the server and possibly working on some minor tweaks, such as drops from spawned creatures being non-transferable. Just wondering if I should get a chance to work on those myself, or should I just point them out?
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PostSubject: Re: Offering some minor assistance.    Sun Dec 04, 2011 1:31 pm

Compile a huge list and post it all at once so Knighty can do all of the minor stuff (fix a word or two in a sentance and such) in one update! So me thinks....
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PostSubject: Re: Offering some minor assistance.    Sun Dec 04, 2011 4:39 pm

Reeper is right. Best thing to do is make a list. If your working on conversation or spelling mistakes. I need area, what has the writing on it and the error that is wrong on it. With out all of that information i normally end up staring blankly at things because I have lot of resources. As for drop able items not lift-able. I have already fixed that . It will be in the next update.
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PostSubject: Re: Offering some minor assistance.    Thu Dec 08, 2011 7:02 am

These are just two of what I've found so far (cuz I've been a bit lazy). So, in Darkened Forest South, the cave with the Tainted Bears (Ursus?) the message you get when you approach it says that there's a growling noise coming from some large preditor = predator

Then, at the Graveyard, on the north side of the Defiled Cathedral, there's an Expensive Gravestone that's on the inside of the cliff.

So far that's all I've got, I'll post more when I find more.

I'm not sure if this is a bug, but I haven't been able to trigger any spawns in any of the dungeons I know of, be they somewhat lower or higher level than what my character is. If this is just temporary for maintenance or overhauling, then I guess no need to answer and I'll see it when the work's done!
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PostSubject: Re: Offering some minor assistance.    Sat Dec 10, 2011 6:04 pm

Found another little bit of spelling that needs a quick fix.

Omen - Northern District - Darkened Woods - Palace

The dead woman placeable in one of the rooms has "entrails" misspelled.

In the placeable it says "intrails".


On another note entirely, the sarcophagi and coffins seem to dispense loot only one per reset. And that's pretty much anywhere that these two loot-able placeables can be found.

Disregard this message if it's meant to be that way.

Likewise, some of the road signs around or in the city's directions are wrong, like the one in a farmland area that says that the Darkened Forest is to the south, but is actually to the North. On the same sign, it says that Nebari (Omen) is to the North, but it's actually to the West.
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PostSubject: Re: Offering some minor assistance.    Sat Dec 10, 2011 6:14 pm

In Omen - City Square

The General Supplies shop is called "Dominacs General Supplies" on the sign, but the area itself is called "Domanics General Supplies"

I'm guessing the name is supposed to be "Dominic", so I suppose both the area and the sign in front of the shop should be changed to "Dominic's General Supplies" or just the name should be changed and an apostrophe should be added.

Inside the shop, there is a sign that says "Apothecarist and Alchemist".

"Apothecarist" should be "Apothecary" and I suspect that the Hypothecary in the city is also supposed to be "Apothecary"

An apothecary is an archaic pharmacist, or more simply, someone who makes and sells medicine, usually made out of herbs he grows himself.
Fixed for as it should be. --> what does this mean...?


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PostSubject: Re: Offering some minor assistance.    Sat Dec 10, 2011 6:36 pm

Related to most Vampire Elders in the Hafen Tavern.

In their dialogue options, it says "Displines" , which is properly spelled "Disciplines".



In Landon Kelm (Brujah Elder)'s dialogue, when you pick the "Sect" option, he starts off with.

"We tend adopt" which should be "We tend to adopt".

A few lines down:

"we havea history with warrior-poets" , which would be more appropriately written as "Throughout history we have been known as warrior-poets"



If the "Haven" option is picked, he starts with:

"Wherever they damn well please." = more appropriately "Wherever we damn well please."



If the "Disciplines" option is picked, then the option to learn more in a discipline is picked after that, he says:

"Which would you like to learn more on?" which would be more appropriate as "Which Discipline would you wish to learn of, neonate?" or not changed at all, up to you.

However, the lines bellow it, when you pick which Discipline to advance in, all three are missing an "of" , or "more about" so they are:

"I wish to learn Presence" --> "I wish to learn more of Presence" --> "I wish to learn more about Presence"
"I wish to learn Potence" --> "I wish to learn more of Potence" --> "I wish to learn more about Potence"
"I wish to learn Celerity" --> "I wish to learn more of Celerity" --> "I wish to learn more about Celerity"

Whichever you pick, he says:

"You seem to know enough to learn 1st\2nd\3rd\etc. level" , which should be "You seem to know enough to learn the 1st\2nd\3rd\etc level of this Discipline."


If the "Backgrounds" option is picked, he mentions "college campuses" , colleges weren't the same as they are now, and there weren't as many, so this line should be changed or edited out.

More will follow soon...

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PostSubject: Re: Offering some minor assistance.    Sat Dec 10, 2011 7:01 pm

Continuing with Landon Kelm (Brujah Elder)

When the Weaknesses option is picked he goes on to explain how brujah are prone to frenzy, but then he says that they "rabidly" deny their predisposition. I assume that this is supposed to be "rapidly"


The "Orginazation" option is obviously misspelled , it should be "Organization"


Asking him about the views of Brujah of other clans:

When you ask about Malkavians, he says that they're "completely batshit". I'm sure that there was no such expression in the 14th century, more appropriately "Their minds are clouded by madness" or "They are severely touched in the head."


Asking about the Nosferatu, he begins his sentence with "Still" which would imply that he had said something opposing his following statement. Since there is no other statement it should be change from "Still, they hit as hard as we do.." to "They hit as hard as we do..."


Asking about Ravnos he simply says "Touch my shit and I"ll rip out your fucking heart." ... I admit this struck me as just...stupid. So I would suggest it's replaced with "Those lot are nothing but thieves and cutthroats, be wary around them."


Asking about the Tremere "It's like someone embraced a bunch of Merlins and told them their spells were real." , this also seems unlike something an Elder would say, it would be more along the lines of "Fake childer who have gained our blessing and curse through trickery and deceit. Their spells were fake once, but now that there is power behind them they are twice cursed."


Asking about Tzrnitse seems wrong to me, obviously , should be Tzimice\Tzimitse or whatever correct spelling of their clan name there is.


Asking about the Ventrue, there is an enormous plot-hole, glaring at anyone who's got his history down properly, he calls the Ventrue fascists, which as a concept did not exist then, or at least it was not called fascism, better to edit this out.
- Taken from books it is as it is supposed to be.


Either whoever wrote the books is an idiot, or they're on the modern setting.



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PostSubject: Re: Offering some minor assistance.    Sat Dec 10, 2011 7:17 pm

Moving on to the other vampires in the Hafen, at least those that will actually speak to my character.

Elijah (The Watcher of the Haven) also calls Disciplines "displines" when the "What can you tell" option is picked at the start of the dialogue. And the following response option "I wish to know displines" is obviously mistaken as well.


Picking the "I wish to know more on being Kindred" option, which sounds to me like the character is asking for a dissertation on the subject and "more on", should be "more about".

Anyway, picking that option, Elijah answers with "Ahh, well your undead now..." where "your" should be "you're".

Then he contradicts himself by saying "Your life is linked to blood" , adding an "un-" prefix to "life" would make it more accurate.

Next up, he says "some elders go up stairs" , where "up stairs" should be "upstairs" , this mistake occurs twice in this line of text.

The second instance where he says "up stairs", there should be a coma after it. I'm not going to point out the punctuational errors so often, but this one is too obvious to miss.

In his dialogue, he keeps mistaking "Disciplines" with "displines" , correction would be appropriate, even if his dialogue is semi-IC.

Also , a specific sentence "Dependant on the level of the displine you are wanting to learn will depend on how much blood it will cost you." this is a blatant error. I suggest replacing it with "Advancing in levels in a Discipline will cost you more blood as you make progress."


The next sentence should be replaced with "The more you perfect a Discipline, the more blood it will cost you to improve on it." , but as it means the same thing as the last sentence, it doesn't even need to be there.
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PostSubject: Re: Offering some minor assistance.    Sun Dec 11, 2011 7:31 am

Omen - North District - Abandoned Manor House

The Flesh-bound Tome in the northern most chamber has a few mistakes in it.

*the stand that holds it up appears to be that of human beings* --> *the stand that holds it up appears to be made of human skeletons\bodies\corpses*

"Why this forsaken place was chosen is beyond my reach." --> "Why this forsaken place was chosen is beyond me."


"Though I suppose it does have one thing good, No one knows of it." --> "Though I suppose it does have it's advantages, it's existence is not widely known."


Next paragraph:

"But a'last I am jumping ahead of myself." --> "But alas, I am getting ahead of myself."

"The troubled people are fleeing to the city just like was planned." --> "Those troubled sheep are flocking to the city as expected/planned."


Next paragraph:

"As soon as this blazing orb in the sky is gone, I shall be happy." --> "I will rejoice on the day that accursed orb is blotted out from my sight." this is more of a stylistic suggestion.

The last two sentences can be connected as so:

"Each time we gather the lambs for the slaughter, we feel the island grow in power."

Last paragraph's last sentence:

"...whatever lays there" --> "whatever lies/lay (both are correct) there"

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